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Review:AC_rules says:
Oh my...pants.

That was actually the most horrible brutal thing I've read for a really long time. Honestly, when it started off was sort of thinking 'I'll start this review by talking about the lovely way the Marina always writes things' but then I got pulled and and then swept up and now I don't want to talk about that because this wasn't lovely at all.

Flitting between all the different scenes was horrifically powerful though: with the present and then all those bits from the past. And the really sudden way you flittered through them was really jarring and just like /ah/ the sort of think that makes you catch your breath. Especially /the/ bit (which I'm going to call the middle bit) oh godness, that was just the worst thing because I could feel it building and building and you knew something was goign to happen.

I loved the ways you sometimes cut it off in the middle of the sentence, that was so clever and brutal and sharp. It was like all of these thoughts running through Teddy's mind all at once and I could just, ahhadojopadjopaj.

This was really cruel. Like, really, it was amazingly well written and stuff but it was horrible. I'm guessing you've got your angst hat back on though and I did love it, in a horrid sort of way.

You're so talented. Blajdija.

AC

Author's Response: Haha! "Horrible" "brutal" "cruel" ... I suppose that's sort of what I was going for! I gave a lot of thought over who and what and when, both for the main character and for the one who dies. I felt like Teddy had more of a story to tell in terms of grief, because he's been there before and so this new, fresh death affects him severely. And I chose Fred because it's more cruel on George. I'm horrible, I know haha.

The cut-offs are there for that exact reason - to throw you off onto a different thought, very much how I think Teddy would be thinking. He's all over the place, he probably can't concentrate on much for long, so the intermittent memory serves as him recalling yet fighting the memory at the same time.

Haha! I don't have a hat for angst. It's always there, but sometimes I stick on a comedy beret. :P

Thanks so much for the review! You're the best ♥


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