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Review:hplover987 says:
Hi :) I'm doing my reviews for my Pureblood Challenge.

I really like this and I'm happy somebody chose to write about Lucy because she can be such an iteresting character but people hardly choose her because she's so minor. I liked that she didn't feel part of her family and had a real hang up and even a fear of her families sucsess and being a failure and I guess disapointing them. You chose to place her in Hufflepuff (which is where I always place her too ; ) ). I think the way you wrote her, questioning herself and where she's destined to go in life fitted Hufflepuff. You went into a little detal about the other members of her family but not in a way that took the focus off Lucy. You wrote in first person well which isn't always easy to do. No grammar stuff as far as I can tell. You also menioned that blood purity doesn't matter to her house and I can never see Hufllepuff's being hung up about it anyway and could see a mixture being sorted into that house.

I would of liked to of seen maybe more info on what blood status means in the next gen era and what it means to Hogwarts but not too much to make you go off point and lose Lucy's thread if that makes sense.

As I said I really liked this and thought you did really well at writing a Pureblood character and writing a family Weasley piece. Well done! You'll hear off me soon through blog and PM if you get 1st, 2nd, 3rd prize or a special mention. Thank you for entering and I enjoyed reading :D x

Author's Response: Hi! I am glad you liked this. I never really thought I'd ever write Lucy but because I paired the phobia challenge with this and needed a pureblood, she seemed like the best option. I did place her in Hufflepuff basically because of her fear of failure, it seemed more fitting. It was either that or Slytherin. She doesn't really feel like a part of her family and spends a lot of time wishing she could be more like them. Talking about her cousins, I had to stop myself after so many, and chose to stick with the ones older than her or the same age, not wanting to completely lose focus of her and ramble too much about them.

I'm glad you thought the first person was written well. It's mainly what I write, so it's good to know I do it well. And I like it because I really enjoy getting into a character's head; I feel like I don't achieve that so much when writing in third person.

I am sorry I did not include more about blood purity. I realize now that that should have been included, I kind of wrapped up in the phobia part of this story. But I think Lucy's character has more pressing things to worry about and doesn't see blood purity as an issue or even bother with those who see differently than her. I don't really see her as being someone to advocate equality even though she has nothing against it. She's sort of too wrapped up in herself for that... and now I'm making her seem pretty self-centered...

Again, I am so glad you liked this and enjoyed the minor Weasley character who doesn't fit in with the rest. Really, this pieced did not turn out anything like I originally planned, but I do like it and think it turned out better than planned, or else you would have been reading an overly emo whiny character, and by 'whiny' i mean whinier than she already is.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing and I can't wait to see the results!

xxEnigmaticEyes16


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