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Review:Roots in Water says:
It's Roots in Water here with your review!

I enjoyed this chapter and I think that you opened a very interesting possibility with this chapter. While we already knew for certain that Narcissa was alive we didn't know that her mother was as well. I found it interesting that Andromeda hadn't stayed in contact with her even though she had (however small) with her sisters. It indicates that she wasn't nearly as close with her mother... It'll be interesting to see how their relationship develops from here, if it does at all.

When you mentioned that there was a mystery guest I immediately thought it would be Narcissa- I was very surprised to see that their mother was still alive. Because Andromeda is a grandmother (however young she is) I always imagined that her parents would be dead. In calculating, though, I realize that she's at most 47, definitely young enough for her parents to still be alive. Math aside, I liked the way you characterized her. She wasn't opening antagonistic or "evil"; rather, she appeared to be a mother concerned about marriage, set firmly in the pureblood ways. I liked the way you did this as it would have been awful for them to fight at Bella's grave. It was certainly a believable way to characterize her and it allows for the possibility that they will reconcile. After all, Andromeda certainly has the desire to be reunited with them.

Though I was surprised at first that her mother talked to her I imagine that the years and grief would have dulled any anger she had at her daughter's unfavourable marriage.

The way you inserted the memory was once again very well done and I think that you chose a very interesting moment. I liked the small details you gave about the sisters in this chapter- Narcissa really came alive for me there when you mentioned that she wanted to be adored in her own right. As well, I found it very interesting that as her mother was talking about her future marriage Andromeda was already planning to elope. In that small memory you did an excellent job of showing Andromeda's current situation with her mother and the small details you included about their lack of contact after the memory really helped to cement the feeling of their relationship.

A small thing: with the phrase "possesses in moments" I think that the word "at" would better suit the meaning of the phrase than "in".

As for the atmosphere of this chapter, there was a definite aura of sadness and I think it did a good job of reflecting Andromeda's actions.

All in all I think that you did a great job with this chapter and I look forward to seeing how you move this story forward from here, what steps you make to (perhaps) bring Andromeda's family back together. Thanks for re-requesting and I hope my comments are helpful!

Author's Response: Hey there! Sorry about the late response - things have been very hectic lately at my end.

First off, I have to confess that this whole chapter turned out nothing like how it was supposed to. It was supposed to be Narcissa, originally, who was also there, and there wasn't meant to be a conversation, but then... well, this happened :p

I know, I always thought their parents would be very old/dead as well. I suppose it doesn't help that Sirius' parents are both dead, of course, which just adds to the idea that all four Black parents aren't alive, you know? I've never thought that purebloods would necessarily be 'evil', just prejudiced, so that's how I wanted to portray her. Also, it was a logical step from the first chapter, where she's so concerned. They might reconcile, they might not... honestly, I don't even know at this stage! :D

Yeah, I thought when I was writing it that maybe time and the fact that she's lost Bellatrix (and, I think, in my notes her husband's dead as well) would push her to just say something, at least. I'm so glad you picked up on that and that it didn't seem odd!

I love putting in little details all over the place so I'm glad you enjoyed them too! Thank you so much for all the compliments and everything - you're picking up on so much and it's so lovely to see! :)

Hm... yeah, you're probably right. I'll take another look over that! Thanks for pointing it out!

Thank you so much for the lovely review - it was very helpful - and sorry again for the late response!

Aph xx


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