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Review:mellypotter1223 says:
I was reading another review that commented on the age thing and your response to it, but it still doesn't make sense. If the characters aged, then the game show would have been done for about a year already by the time they are said to be 23 years old. In the story, the last few dates and the finale occur after they age 2 years. At the start of the story, Ron and hermione are 21, fine. Ginny turns 20, Harry turns 21, they get married, fine. Hermione turns 22 at the end of the plane expedition, fine. At this point, we are in September and the game show is still running. Then in the beginning of October, they go to hogwarts...still good. But then all of a sudden, they jump 1.5 years in age, but time wise we are still in the same year. I know this because logically, one season of a show is a little less than ONE year long. That and at some point, you said that hermione and Ron only fooled Ginny for a few months. And there is no way hermione and ron would have continued fighting for more than a year. That would just be extensive and ridiculous. So as far as time is concerned, we are still in the same year as the story started and Ron is 21 until we reach April, hermione is 22, Harry is 21, and Ginny is still 20. Now that being said, if you are keeping to cannon, Ginny doesn't have her first baby until she is at least 23 or 24. And victoire should have been born in may at least a year ago according to j.k. Rowling. This story is really well written and funny and endearing, but I feel like after the halfway point, you were trying to rush time a bit in order to fit everything in, but the storyline wasn't keeping up with the timeline. It is all fixable, and for a sequel, it doesn't need to fall immediately after this story ends, but if you go through and fix the ages and baby births and such, the sequel could pick up a few years later with a pregnant Ginny and a 4 year old victoire. Maybe fix victoire's birth as a flashback or something instead of making it occur in present time.

Author's Response: First of all, let me just say that I wrote this story in 2009. I have no intention whatsoever of going back and changing ANYTHING. I'm done. Really.

Next, I'm going to remind you that I posted an author's note in the middle of the story saying that I had aged the characters, one which you obviously didn't read. Now, by aging the characters, I don't mean that they both had birthdays. I mean that I moved them up a few years from the start of the story. So they were older at the very beginning. I did this because I felt that the characters were doing things too old for their ages, especially Ginny and Harry. Married when Ginny was nineteen? Yikes.

However, the story is very, very long. I am not going to go back and change every single chapter so that the ages are different. It's a colossal waste of my time when the story is already completed. I've moved on. I've written the sequel. I'm not changing anything. And I don't appreciate you implying that my story isn't "fixable" simply because of a continuity issue.

Maybe if this were constructive criticism on a more current and shorter story I would be more appreciative of it, but I find it ridiculous for a person to leave two reviews both complaining about a continuity error that has been explained in reviews and in author's notes. I wrote this story about three years ago now. My writing and stories are very different. I'm already finished writing the sequel. In the future, if you'd like to leave CONSTRUCTIVE criticism on a story that is currently going on, criticism about my writing instead of just the ages of the characters, that would be more welcome.

I do this for fun. I never said I would be JK Rowling or Jane Austen. It could be laziness, but seriously, does it matter that much that you have to leave two reviews complaining about it?

And I'm sorry fifty chapters seems "rushed" to you. I'm not sure how long you'd have me make this story. ~writergirl8

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