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Review:Keira7794 says:
Hello!

Woah, where to start?

I loved how you started the chapter from Stan's viewpoint - it gave a great outsiders opinion. It also was realy well narrated and brought be into the situation immedietly.

This chapter was full of mystery! Whether it be Draco's disappearance (or the threat he was under). Or Astoria's mystery illness. Or Scorpius' indifference. Or who Elodie actually is. Or why she turned him down.

There's just so much unaswered that I really want to carry on reading! So great job on gripping the reader :P

Your characterisation was brilliant and the story flowed really well. It was the small details, such as the aged house-elf or the puddle that Elodie stepped into which made this such a good piece.

My favourite line was 'the faint spots of blood on an old dusty mirror, that glowed crimson in the moonlight'. Really brilliant line! xD

Great first chapter!

Keira :)

Author's Response: Hi Keira, thanks for stopping by!

I always have issues with regarding to encorporating back story and how characters actually look (without doing some elaborate description while they stand in front of the mirror) - so Stan and the Daily Prophet report was a way of dealing with that.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!


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