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Review:Keira7794 says:
Hello Beeezie :)

I'm here with your 1/10 review - sorry for the wait!

I... I really loved this chapter. No really, it was brilliant. The whole chapter was full of tension of war and her fear that she would be captured at any moment. The extra details, such as her mother's sickness or her brother's disappearance, added to the threatening atmosphere and really made this realistic. You made Marlene into an actual person rather than just a character with predicatable lines.

I really liked the theme of referring to the weather such as; 'Marlene was living on borrowed time, and she knew it. One more day was one more day. She hoped that the snow would keep coming'. This was a brilliant use of making the weather reflect the tense mood (I think it's called pathetic falacy?).

Gideon just made you want to go 'awhh' - you really got across that he is a lifeline of sort for Marlene. She is obviously scared and knows that she isn't likely to survive the war but links safety with Gideon and happier times. You really got this across well.

I just can't get across how brilliant this chapter is! None of it seems forced, the characters seem realistic and it's just spot on to how I imagine the first Wizarding War would be like.

Fantastic job - I'll add it to my favourites now!

Keira :)

Author's Response: Oh, no worries. You know how I am with reviews - we all have lives, and those come first. :)

I'm really glad that you liked this so much. I really enjoyed writing it, and I'm actually quite proud of it! I think I'm going to need to start writing some more marauders era fics - especially first wizarding war ones - because this was really rewarding. I'm currently playing with one about Remus and an OC.

Thank you so much. Like I said, I'm really proud of this story, so this review and the favourite really meant a lot to me. :)


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