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Review:hplover987 says:
Wow! I really loved this! I loved how at the beginning you had that inner thought about how she'd be forgotten in a way and just be another name.

I loved how you showed her fear and how she felt like a coward for hiding as she watched bodies fall and the dead order and good members lying dead while she hid. It felt really real.

Then the scene of her seeing Percy's family and seeing the beauty of the sadness, as you wrote that I imagined the scene and got the sense of raw beauty that grief has and her just wanting to capture it and document it.

Then I thought the end was actually quite beautiful in a sad way with Percy holding her and kissing her but then questioning himself after. And the way you linked the intro up with the end.

If this is your first attempt at angst then well bloody done!! Its hard to get the balence right and make it touching without depressing :) x

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing me so quickly! You certainly got around to it quicker than I did you.

Thank you so much! that means the world to me! I know that encouraging stuff like that helps me write so much ♥ I do think that is something you would worry about in a situation like that, personally. Also, I think Penny is quite insecure, so that spurred the thought on :D

That scene wasn't originally going to be in it, neither was Percy, but it suddenly came to me, and is certainly my favourite part. I could just imagine it as a photograph, and I think Penny would be a photographer, the way I imagine her, so I sort of put two and two together.

Thank you again, it means so much that someone likes my writing, and I hope i didn't make it too depressing. That would be bad :L I don't think I did, anyway.

Thanks so much for the review!!!

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