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Review:SeverusSnape15 says:
Hello! Cierra from the forums with your review!

I LOVE all of your stories, I have to say this now. Your slash is remarkable and it's some of the best I've read. You create your characters very well, describing them vividly. It's okay that this is slightly uncanon, because it's not too noticable, nor would many people care about that.

I love the ending. It's perfect. Maybe it is random, but it fit in pretty good. I love 'kissing in the rain' cliches. They're so romantic.

As for errors, you have a lot of little ones, like just forgetting to add the 's' on 'makes.' small things like this. On one, I saw "Amdromeda." They're small ones, but you'll want to go back and fix these.

I was surprised that Teddy wasn't upset that Scorpius sort of took his spot light. It was his wedding and Scorp pretty much made people concentrait on them instead. I would get upset with this. But your Teddy seems like a nice guy. The way you described Victoire, though, I would have thought she would have gotten upset.

Altogether, I honestly say, this is a wonderful fic. Just a few edits needed. Maybe get a Beta :) Or just read it aloud to yourself. You'll see your mistakes if you do that.

~Cierra.

Author's Response: Thank you for that!

It's my favorite cliche (if you can have one). I love it in movies, I just can't help it. :)

I fixed the errors you pointed out. :)

No. Teddy planned it, to help Hugo. He'd do anything for family and he'd told Vic beforehand, so she knew. It was never a surprise, he just wasn't sure it would work. I'm thinking of writing a sequel, it would be explained then, bu I'm not sure.

Thank you for reviewing. :)

Sam.


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