I absolutely adore this story! I love how you choose Ron/Hermione because you are rightÖthey are the most realistic pairing in the series. They had that awkward edge as best friends, always fighting and snapping at each other, early on in the books and as time went on, it just seemed right for them to be together. And because of that, I always love reading fics centring around them, which is why Iím glad I stopped by to read this!
The first thing I noticed, which I have really grown to like, is the use of second person. Iím not quite sure what it is I like about second person, but you really pulled it off well in this. It really fit in the story to have it second person, and Iím thinking itís mostly just because itís Ron. And Ron, for whatever reason, works really well in this perspective. It seems to really bring out his character and make him seem more real.
I also love how you flip from telling the story from Ronís perspective to Hermioneís. I will say that I was confused the first time it switched, but I think thatís just this cold making my mind slow, because when I reread through that section it made total sense. And I really found it cool how you did the switching. Especially as the story drew to a close and switched between Ron and Hermioneís perspectives because it really seemed like they were just continuing each otherís thoughts. Which is something that really seems to define them as a pairing, which I think is really adorable!
I think my favourite line of this entire thing is: ďThere was a lot more paperwork involved in that than youíd anticipated, and having someone else from the Department of Magical Law Enforcement talk you through it felt all wrong, like putting on socks inside-out.Ē Just because it really sounds like something that would run through Ronís mind. And I just really like the reference to socks inside-out. Because I agree, it does feel a bit wrong.
This was really fantastic and I love that you tried experimenting with your style. It turned out well.
Author's Response: I have to give eternal praise to JKR for a lot of reasons, obviously, but perhaps chief among them is for writing Ron and Hermione. ♥ And I think my favorite aspect of that pairing IS its realism -- the romance wasn't hurried, wasn't forced. It progressed naturally and took /seven years/, which is tremendously impressive. But enough on my little rant on them, I suppose. :D I'm so glad you stopped by, too!
I love second person, but I've only written one other fic in that point of view. It just seemed right for this one, though, and very nearly wrote itself, as a lot of my one-shots do. As did the flipping perspectives -- I knew to get the full story I'd have to tell it from both sides, so that's what I did!
Inside-out socks are so bothersome. :P Seriously, though, thank you so much for being willing to drop by and give this a read. And I'm sorry it took so long for me to come back here and respond. But I'm really glad you enjoyed the story!