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Review:Snapdragons says:
asdfjk; Jane! This is actually so adorable that it made my heart melt. It's sort of strange because I love obscure pairings and characters, but at the end of the day, Ron/Hermione has always been my OTP. I think it's sort of what you said - they're the most realistic. There's just something about them that means that I can never ship either of them with anyone else - it just isn't right.

So rant on why I love this ship aside, I'm so glad you wrote about them and totally did it justice! Like I said - this is adorable and captures the two of them spectacularly.

I'm presuming that this is what you were talking about when you asked about experimenting - and I'm really glad you did! I think it came out excellent. I liked the usage of second person - it can sometimes be a gamble, I think, whether or not it works out, but it definitely did here. I felt like I was actually in their heads, and it made it easy to connect to the emotions.

The italics made it really clear that the tense was switching as well, and even though you were using 'you' for both parts, it was completely obvious that the narrator had changed from the voice that was being used. Both parts sounded distinct and totally in character - that was so Ron. ♥

My very favorite part was the end - brilliant. I seriously adored it. You definitely shouldn't be afraid to experiment, because you pull it off /so well/! It flowed seamlessly and just... gah. I actually don't have the words to describe it, but it's one of my favorite endings to a one shot ever. :)

This was incredibly sweet and such a delight to read. NEVER EVER STOP WRITING or I will seriously cry. ♥ ♥

Author's Response: HANNAH. CAN I EVEN DO THIS JUSTICE. ♥

I'm like you, I think -- I love the minor characters and the twisty exploration of motivations, but Ron/Hermione is something I'll always return to and love. :) They've always been the pairing that I've stayed true to, if that's the word I'm looking for, since the very beginnings of my foray into writing fan fiction. And it's almost strange that this was my first on this archives account, really.

This is my experiment story, and I'm really quite pleased with how it turned out! It came out a lot more coherent than I was imagining, I think, judging from the reviews, which is always very encouraging. And I love second person -- that actually came before the pairing here. :D

I LOVED THE END TOO, IN MY SELFISH WAY. Ahh, you have just made my day a thousand times over. ♥ I was sitting in a chair reading, actually, half-thinking about this story while I did, and those lines (and the switching of points of view between them) popped into my head without my even consciously noticing it. It was great!

You lovely, dear girl. ♥ THANK YOU FOR READING THIS. Your review is incredible, and I cannot tell you what it means to have it!


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