hello last marauder
sorry for such a late review. actually i was really busy as my college has just opened after a short vacation.
i really like the way u have portrayed moody in this chapter.after reading it i really felt sorry for him. the job which he love most and for which he has sacrificed so many thing, in the end lost it due to dirty politics.
one thing just occurred to me is that he most of the time liked to call tonks by nymphedora, so here also while he was thinking abt her it would be more appropiate if he will call her " young nyphedora". its just my view ^_^.
i really like the relationship between lupin and moody.
at one place u have written abt albus that he refused power for the sake of power. i personally think that he never wanted power. that line is little confusing. u can use other word like " for the sake of greater good" or something else.
ohhh moody thinks that merlin is still alive ( ^_^) . and he has proof also owo, why not he is telling his theory to albus.i am sure luna will believe her.
i am looking forward for next chapter. hope it will up soon
Author's Response: Hi there!
Thank you so much for being my first reviewer! I hope college is going well for you! :)
I am glad that you felt sorry for Moody, because that was what I wanted the people who read this chapter to feel. This chapter is just a prelude, I wrote it so that Moody would have some rapport, or connection with the reader, which will make what happens in the next chapter (the kidnapping) more moving and shocking and sad (or so I hope!). This chapter is just an introduction really. All the action and drama will be in the next chapter!
With regard to Moody calling Tonks "Tonks" or "Nymphadora". Well, in the books, Moody refers to everyone by their surnames: "Dumbledore", "Longbottom", "Potter", "Lupin" etc. He doesn't actually call Tonks anything in the books (just because he has so few lines). However, judging by the fact that he calls everyone else by their surname, I am guessing he would refer to Tonks as such as well. Plus, pretty much everyone calls Tonks "Tonks" anyway. I know in the films he calls Tonks "Nymphadora", but I don't really follow what they do in the films, the books are the source material I use and that is why I had Moody call Tonks "Tonks" instead of "Nymphadora".
I am so glad that you liked the friendship between Moody and Lupin, I really liked that too myself.
With regards to the issue of Dumbledore and power... I kinda want to contest you there a little bit. Dumbledore DID want power. When he was 18, he wanted the Elder Wand and he and Grindlewald wanted to rule the world with it essentially. Dumbledore himself said that he had proved at the age of 18 that he could not be trusted with power. But power still tempted him, that was why he took James Potter's invisibility cloak and why he put on Marvolo Gaunt's ring as well. He was tempted by power, he wanted power. That was why Dumbledore never took the Minister of Magic job, because he did not trust himself with power. He refused to have power for the sake of having power. Power was his temptation, his weakness. He was happy being Headmaster of Hogwarts, and the only reason to leave that position would be if he was offered a better position (ie a more powerful one - Minister of Magic). But Dumbledore didn't trust himself with power, so he just stayed where he was as Headmaster. He was happy there, there was no point leaving a job he loved to another for the sake of having power... or at least that was what I was trying to get at here.
The next chapter will be submitted on Monday, and depending on how long the queue is, it should be up by the end of the week (hopefully), so keep an eye out, it will be up within the week ;)
Thanks again for reviewing and for being my first reviewer. The next chapter is far more exciting and dramatic than this one! This one is only an introduction, a prelude, a chapter to set the scene! Thanks so much for your review, I really appreciate it! I hope you like the next chapter now!