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Review:ginerva_molly_weasley says:
First of all can I say that yours is probably one of my first Minerva/Alastor pairings I've read!

I liked the way you flicked between two different era's, first with her being so young and then the next with her going into the 7th year. It gives a contrast to how much she has changed but at the same time it shows that little things such as a strong can transport her to have the same feelings that she did before.

I also like the way you've connected the title as being the song that's significant in this song as it really does show how important the song was to Minerva when she was younger.

Making Alastor one of her best friends is a nice idea because then you can have the love triangle with her, the bad boy (Tom Riddle) and the best friend. Mentioning Tom in the first chapter was also a nice touch as it adds an aire of mystery and intrigue as to where you're going to go with the rest of the story.

A couple of things I noticed which I've mentioned to you already is the paragraphing structure. Please break it down. It looks really imposing to the prospective reader and even I wanted to run away screaming! I also noticed that in the 2nd paragraph somewhere you've repeated the word 'record' twice.

As for the rest of the story... I don't have a clue. Maybe make Tom and Minerva meet in the corridors and have a little bit of an eye contact motion? But the rest is up to you!

Author's Response: Summer! Well originally I was meaning to scrap that beginning because at first I wanted to make this a one shot but then I got all these ideas and it worried me about fitting them in. So now it will hopefully become a multi chaptered fic if the creative juices come back! Eventually I decided its one of the most descriptive openings I've ever done so I thought to myself I can try to work round it and if the readers don't like it I'll get rid.

With the song, I wanted it to be based round a song from the 40's because that's the time she grew up in and recently becoming aware of her family background I knew how to tie it in. I immediately went to Frank Sinatra because he's the most famous singer from that time (to my knowledge anyway), and then I had to pick one precisely from 1941 just to get the dates right and out of the ones I found that was the song I fell in love with and I knew it could tie in perfectly!

Alastor is a character I haven't looked at before so I thought maybe I'll just make him a little like Minerva and like how JKR portrays him, so then people aren't doubting their friendship. Whereas Tom, he couldn't be too involved in the chapter, if he had been then the atmosphere would've changed completely.

Finally, paragraphing is something I can forget to do so I know they must be really long. I forget about the breaks and how readers need to be able to scream and not get lost in those words so I'll fix it up at some point, promise!

I think for the next chapter Tom & Minerva will meet and I'll probably make this Minerva's pov all the way through now.or maybe not I haven't definitely decided on it yet.

Thank you for the review and I hope that this response is long enough :D :D lol

Bex


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