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Review:the_edge_of_love says:
I loved this chapter, as well!

Here, you managed to keep the wonderful atmosphere of your Prologue without having so many descriptions, and at the same time you introduced as to the plot.

I liked all the characters here, both the Resistance Members (especially Delilah-Beau's description makes her such a lovely character, while Carmen's worries are the right kind of disturbing) and the Vampire Royalties (I'd love to see how the Katrina/Zane storyline will develop).

Katrina' storyline was a surprise (you presented everything so dark in the first chapter that I didn't expect any happy endings for humans). However, I did appreciate her second thoughts: I find them very much in character, given her past. I'd love an introduction of her mother as well. I'm curious about her story with the King.

Silver, on the other hand, is the kind of vampire I thought I'd meet in your story. I enjoyed her little argument with Katrina, but I also liked the fact that her sister admits that they could be friends- under different circumstances. I'm also intrigued by the implication you made about a power struggle in the vampire society.

The only negative thing I have to say in this chapter is that it was a bit fragmentary. I'd like to see more about the resistance- perhaps in a different chapter than this one so it wouldn't be tiring.

In anyway, I really liked this- and I'd love to read more, whenever you update:D

~ Angie

Author's Response: Hello again! :)

I've come to realize that in all actuality, my backgrounds for most of the characters are... lacking to say the least. I hadn't noticed it before, but it's something a lot of the reviews I've requested from various people have picked up on, for which I'm extremely grateful. I'll have to get to word on carving a specific backstory for each of them and figure out the best place to put it!

The only reason Katrina was saved was because of her mother, which her and Pollock's story is interesting enough I've thought about making it into a separate novel in and of itself once this one is completed. I am however, thinking of having Katrina relate the story her father always told about the vampires at bedtime (though obviously completely biased as he doesn't want her to realize how murderous he actually is!) to explain some of this! It's a lot of background, and a lot of new stuff which is always hard to write properly!

Yes, Silver is the kind of vampire who, like Pollock and most of the other vampires in this story, are what you'll likely see more. Katrina's a bit of an exception, and there's a reason for that, too! She doesn't let one way of thinking cloud her mind to the other possibilities, and she's possibly the only vampire with a soft spot for the humans, though you don't see it in this chapter. She's loyal to her family though, mostly her mother, which will impact her role in this story!

I'd love to update very soon, but I honestly don't know when it will happen :/ I'm taking the weekend off work though to recover from wisdom teeth removal, so maybe I'll have some added time in there ;)

Thanks again for the lovely review!


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