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Review:Tonks1247 says:
Aw! This was so adorable!

I really love the fact that you decided to do Bill’s chapter on his youngest brother coming home from St. Mungos. It was not a moment I really ever thought much about just because I only have one younger sibling and I was too young to remember her coming home. So I never had the fear of not being loved because of a little sibling. But you really display that fear of not being loved, of being forgotten quite well. I could honestly see this entire scene taking place in my head and it was not difficult at all to feel Bill’s emotions. It was soo realistic and you really did a fantastic job!

I will admit, I was a little concerned when Bill told his mother to ‘take him back.’ I was worried that Bill didn’t want anything to do with his brother anymore, but once it started talking about him digging in his toy box, I knew what was going on. And as soon as Bill returned, I was fighting back tears. It’s just so sweet that he so willingly gave up his bear to his brother. He is such an amazing big brother to Ron. And I especially love the ‘he liked it’ exclamation. It was so fitting. Really great.

One thing I noticed, that could definitely just be me was this sentence:

“Now he’d started, though, he found it hard to stop, words pouring from his mouth before he could think about them properly.” –Maybe having ‘Now he’d started…’ being ‘Now that he’d started…’ just for sentence flow?

But other than that small thing, I really did enjoy this chapter. The Weasley’s are such a fun family to follow. I’m glad you wrote this! It’s amazing! And I’ll be back to read more soon, I’m sure!

~Grimmerz

Author's Response: I never really gave that moment a lot of thought, either, until I actually knew I had to sit down and write about Bill sooner or later. :P And then, of course, this idea made it sooner, but yeah. I'd like to think the reaction from at least one of the boys might have been something similar to this.

Bill and Charlie always seemed like such loving big brothers, not snobbish, as big brothers are sometimes seen, and I really love that about them. Makes me wish for a brother of my own!

Thanks so much for the sweet review -- totally made my day! You're awesome! ♥

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