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Review:EnigmaticEyes16 says:
Aw, this was a sad story. I think you portrayed Dominique and Teddy pretty well. I always picture Victoire to be prim and proper and Dominique to be the wild child, even though she didn't seem that wild in this one-shot.

I would have liked to have seen maybe a glimpse though of her and Victoire's sisterly relationship. It seemed sort of lacking that she would do that to her sister without it. Maybe if there was a scene with Victoire sort of Teddy-centered but not with Teddy where we could see them interact and see how the sisters treat each other. I think something like that would have really helped make your story better than it already is.

Like I said, it was sad, and you did a really good job of putting across the sadness from the very beginning. I liked how in the end she did put an end to their relationship so as to not to continue hurting her sister. This one-shot was very well written and I think you did a really good job with it.

xxEnigmaticEyes16

Author's Response: I am glad you think I portrayed them too well. Well I didn't show dominique's wild side in this, because it was a sad theme, but I tried to show that she does have a wild side with that little flashback :)

Hmm, I didn't want to make the one shot too long, and my prime focus was Teddy & Dom, that's why I didnt show more about the 2 sisters relationship, but maybe when I do an edit, I'll throw in a flashback about them somewhere :D

I am glad you liked it overall, and the end, and you find it well-written. Thank you for your comments :)



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