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Review:TheDoctor says:
Hey, Astoria Viana here :)

So first off I'm a wannabe actress in training right now so I just loved this story by default :)

I will say I've seen allot of fics that have Lucy as an artist type but usually as a visual one or literary so this definitely separated itself from the masses. You also did a wonderful job putting so much character into Lucy within the framework of a one-shot, especially as we know next to nothing about her in terms of canon.

Speaking of characterizations I simply adored the descriptions of her cousins/siblings. Also of her father, I always get a little mixed up in terms of next gen family tree type things but I was able to figure out she was talking about Percy without even having to google who her parents were. I know, shameful, I sometimes have to resort to google for HP facts, I swear I try to remember everything but honestly, my brain is complete rubbish at memorization. But I digress.

Anyway, I really liked this allot, I think the beginning was a tad slow but it fit well with the story so i wouldn't change it. I also have to say, you have so much room for a sequel! i want to learn about Lucy and the Dramatic Arts School!

The only thing I would comment on is that since we only know Molly from Lucy's descriptions it might work to have another, maybe smaller conversation earlier in the story between the two that's less heartfelt. That way there's more groundwork for Lucy to be shocked and disbelieving at first of Molly's turn-around. Still it isn't really necessary, just a thought :)

Overall though I really loved this! I really do hope you write a sequel too :)
~Ria

Author's Response: Hi! I'm glad you think this story isn't so much like the other Lucy stories. I personally have never read Lucy before (that I can remember, anyway). I really like that about the next-gen, too, because I don't really read it that often so I am able to create my own next-gen without influence from other stories. And thanks! Lucy certainly does have a lot of character. She became so angsty so quickly, when I was originally going for something more pathetic and whiny, but I ended up sticking with the angst and letting it fly.

Ha, I'm glad you like my descriptions of her cousins, it was one of the first bits I'd written when working on this and I really enjoyed it, you know, writing the envious non-perfect character who wishes she was like her other, more attractive and awesome cousins. And I'm glad it was easy to pick up that her father is Percy. That is probably the closest I will ever get to writing him, he's way too uptight for me.

I can see how the beginning might be slow. But I think it's picks up quickly. Honestly, though, I figured people would find Lucy super annoying, but I'm glad they don't. That would be interesting, to have a less heartfelt conversation between Lucy and Molly. I don't know how I would fit that in, possibly in a flashback, but then it sort of overrides with quotes from her in Lucy's monologue.

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you picked this story to r/r. A sequel though? I don't know. Not being a actress or even an actress in training, I don't really know anything about dramatic arts. So that would make it difficult. I don't know. Maybe a one-shot in the distant future, but I can't make any promises because I've got way too many other things I want to write right now that I've been mucho procrastinating on.

xxEnigmaticEyes16


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