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Review:Akussa says:
Hiya!

Oh I love how this story is developping. This meeting was very well executed. I found it very interesting and realistic how Tonks acted and her inquiery was belivable.

Teddy's story was, erm, strange. I can understand how Tonks was doubting his story. I don't mean you did a bad job, quite the opposite! It was well done and a teenager that does not really understand how things were during the war would come up with a story like this. Tonks' questionning was spot on.

I found Teddy was very solid emotionaly; he managed to keep his emotions in check when facing his mother for the first time. That did strike me as a bit hard to believe considering how unstable Teddy was in the three first chapters. I'm not saying it's bad or anything, just surprising.

I noticed one little thing :

"...the fact that he was a good few inches taller than he was."; I think you mean... 'than SHE was...'

Overall, a great chapter and I love your characterization of Tonks in this chapter. Can't wait to the rest and how Teddy will really get through this periode in the past!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your great review and for catching a(nother) typo! I'll fix that one straight after responding. :)

In my previous version, Teddy's story was even odder, and I didn't deal with the concept of him randomly appearing out of nowhere at all. I'm glad that his story was realistic for a kid, though (SO hard to come up with!). You'll see more of the Tonks' reactions to Teddy in the next chapter. Let's just say that while Tonks buys that Teddy isn't a Death Eater, she still doesn't quite believe his story (and what respectable auror would?).

As for Teddy's personality, from my own personal experiences, teenagers are SO unpredictable: mature one moment and irrational and moody the next. But you've definitely given me something to think about while writing the next chapters. I will say that while Teddy might be okay with keeping his emotions in check with his mother, he's going to have more trouble once he meets Remus (and I won't reveal any more about that). ;)

Thanks again for the review and giving me things to think about! I'll be sure to keep your thoughts in mind while writing the next chapters. x


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