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Review:apocalypse says:
Hey! This is apocalypse, here with your review!

I've been waiting for this story to be updated since so long that I thought I'll review this one first and then go back to Seeing Double =)

Firstly, I think that after such a long wait, I was a bit disappointed. It was a short chapter for me and I had expected something more. The plot didn't really move ahead like I wanted it to. I understand the importance of the pace being slow sometimes but I think that you should move it along sometimes too. I hope you know what I mean =)

Apart from that I think that this chapter was lovely. The way you described her emotions and made her change Bella's grave was heartwarming. It's interesting to see how she's feeling that sisterly bond after so many years, and I would like you to explain that point more, but nevertheless it's a good way of continuing Andy's story and it's working so far =)

When she got angry at everyone for not caring for Bellatrix anymore, I felt like I knew exactly how she felt. I think it was right of her to feel the way she did and her frustration and anger were justified.

Your description was beautiful here. It was so brilliant and so realistic that even I got scared when she heard the twig snapping and then turned her head. The overall effect was great! Those words combined with the knowledge that she was in a cemetery made my hair rise at that point. The eerie feeling was created well. Really good job!

I can't believe there mother is alive! I wish there had been more of her in this chapter but I think I'll have to wait after all! It's gotten me excited for some reason =P The way you connected her appearance with the memory was excellent. The transition from reality to memory was pretty smooth. I think that even the simple scene like that memory did a very good job in describing her current situation with her mother. You explained her doubts well and the reason why she ran was pretty apparent.

The uncomfortable conversation and the silence between mother and daughter was written excellently! Loved it all. Well, she wants her family back because nothing is more important than the bond of family! =P Been hearing that a lot recently =D

I loved coming back to this! Update soon! Good luck and Happy Writing! =D

Author's Response: Gah, I'm sorry you were disappointed! The plot isn't moving along quite as fast as I intended it to (things never happen as I want them to), but the things which happened in the chapter, particularly at the end, were kinda important to the plot... as you'll see next chapter ;) But yeah, I know what you mean, don't worry, and I'll try to pick the pace up a bit.
I wasn't sure about making her change the grave at first, but then I thought 'why not?' it's not exactly as if Bellatrix's grave is going to be a popular site, so people won't really notice anything. Sisterly bond... there will be more of that in later chapters, probably the one after the next one, I think.
Thanks! I'm glad you like the description. Hehe... I enjoy scaring people. Tis fun.
I double-checked the Black family tree to make sure it fits in with canon - and it doesn't say when she dies, so I kept her alive! According to the plan in my head, she'll turn up again, but I'm not 100% sure ;)
Writing that conversation was oddly fun. I wanted to make it realistic, so hopefully it worked :) Family is important! :P

Thanks for the lovely review! It was very helpful! (There may be an update coming soon - I'm halfway through the next chapter at the moment, btw)
Aph xx


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