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Review:PinkHinkyPunk says:
Hey, I know I promised to review every chapter but you've updated the last few so quickly I'll probably just leave one, now, hope that's ok!
It was really nice to read how Hermione and Draco's relationship came about in the flashback, their story is really sweet.
Some of the details/timings of the labour and delivery are maybe a little off, but as you say, it's not something you've got a huge amount of knowledge about. It really doesn't detract much from the story, I doubt many people reading will be looking for a medically accurate portrayal of a birth, so I really wouldn't worry about it. It's more about Alix and Tyler's relationship and their relationship with their baby, and you've written that really well.
The only thing I'd say wasn't quite right in this chapter would be the mention of the epidural. Generally if it's time to push, it's too late for one. I doubt any woman could hold herself in the right position and stay still enough for the needle to be inserted into the spine while having the urge to push. But that's a minor detail and it's really not important. I can have a quick re-read of the past chapters again and maybe make the odd suggestion if you'd like? (Not that I'd claim to be an expert! Haven't had a baby yet myself, though I have studied it briefly at uni - I've trained as a children's nurse - and I do watch a fair number of documentaries etc on anything to do with health including pregnancy and birth.)

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! It means sooo much to me! I'm really glad you like the story and it means alot to me that you liked Draco & Hermione's flashback and how I'm portraying Alix & Tyler's relationship with their baby. :) I tried so hard to do that right, and Im glad to know its being appreciated. Thanks for your suggestions and I'm going to try to go back and fix some of those points that I can! :) I would love to keep hearing your constructive criticism if you'd like to keep giving it! Thanks so so much!!

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