|Review:||October Sea Breeze says:|
Where is my Doctor! Moreover, where is my precious Rory? No, you should not expect me to ask after Amy or River - that is not me ^^
I need my Doctor! Or my Rory! I actually need my Rory a lot! Can't you just let Amy disappear like she always does and then 11 & Rory have to save the day! And loads of slashy action is involved (forgive the shipperheart).
To the story, I think... you updated! Are you still in on the finish-in-a-month-thing? Good, very nice! How's the next chapter? Finished, even better! All is pink and fluffy and shiny! Ahem... I saw Henry VIII during history, that's my excuse of my hyperactivity. Honestly, I wanted this so much to be updated during school xD Move on with it! Finish it in a month and race to eternal glory! Ahem.
Back to the point: fangirl screams Johnlock met Terry and Sherlock was being blatantly brilliant. I actually wanted him to me more in Le Face of Terry, more that he knew that Terry was a fraud. John was lovely though - poor, poor John. *huggles John*
I dunno why, but this chapter felt shorter for some reason, though I think in word count the 1st is the shorter one. It was maybe because it didn't have that much information as the first - correct me if I'm wrong - or because I'm tired. I know chapters with not a lot of info are good sometimes, but I think that this needs to be further up a story.
Another reason might be that you seem to hurry it a little and don't take this as a bad thing cause it's probably going to be quite action-like (too stupid to go and check the genres) and that's not really my style considering fics - dear, dear, did I ever attempt a Superwholock? I'm weird. You're weird, you write this! So many characters, my head would explode.
I think it just did explode by the just amazing amazingness of this. But I really want my precious Rory. Or I will start sobbing, call Moriarty and he'll make you into shoes cause he likes me. Will Moriarty be alive in this? Or... cause me love Jim. Or James. Or Richard. Or whatever you wanna call him.
God, this review is taking me ages (for the record: this is the 1h mark, I review slooow apparently). Maybe it's because I just keep re-reading the chapter cause I just love it too much. Ah, you know I like Wholock... Potter or no Potter, I'd still read it.
If you ever watch Supernatural: which you should, you woman! Obey the fandom! I need to write a SWL with you xD I Command you! Or I'll call Jim and you'll still be made into shoes. Yay!
As a last question cause I'm too stubborn to finish off this review before I reach 500 words: Will people die? What the hell happened to Terry? When is the Mystrade coming? Will there be an awkward gay mistake between John and Sherlock cause one needs that! It's in every episode of Sherlock [correct me if I'm wrong] and so it needs to be in every fic as well! Dear dear, you'll need a Slash warning... just for my reviews even. [insert evil laughter here].
That was not one question - I know. I'm going to set myself a challenge right now: more than 300-words reviews every chapter! Woop woop! You write on darling, cause I'm impatient! And I'm probably not the only impatient person reading this story... :D I'm demanding, ain't I?
And I managed 600 words! Go me! GO YOU!
Author's Response: DOCTOR WILL BE IN CHAPTER THREE I PROMISE.
-shrugs- River won't be in this story, and I'm not sure what I'm doing with Amy yet. But I should warn you and your shipperheart that Amy/Rory is my OTP to beat all OTPs across all fandoms and I WILL GO DOWN WITH THIS SHIP.
There will be plenty of In Le Face Sherlock, though I admit him being in Terry's face would have been fun. But so was the 'strutting away after saying maybe two sentences to the guy and knowing he isn't who he claims to be because I'm SHERLOCK HOLMES' bit.
John was great. When I wrote his lines I heard them in Martin Freeman's voice. Well actually that goes for all the Sherlock characters, but that's beside the point.
I am a demon when it comes to short chapters. It is my biggest weakness. Hit 1500 words or something approaching it and BAM it's up on the archive. I don't edit. I don't plan. And I have short chapters. But it's either quick updates or long chapters, you can't have both. Actually no, I never write long chapters. My longest chapters were in Dragons Awakening and that was only because I wrote it for NaNoWriMo and had to beef up the word count.
Rory's on his way. Eventually. He might get a bit lost or confused or die again or stop existing on the way, but he'll get there. Promise.
I do need to watch Supernatural. I will. I have three weeks of holidays left, Supernatural will happen.
Alas, I cannot answer all of your questions! You'll see what happened to Terry pretty quickly (chapter three, not too far away) There does need to be one of those awkward mistake moments, I quite agree.
More-than-300-word reviews every chapter? You are too kind. And no, you're not the only impatient person reading, which is good because I'm an impatient writer. This works.
Good effort on 600 words. I'm impressed. Thanks for the review!