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Review:Dobby101 says:
I never thought 500 words could hold so much! haha Overall, I think you did a very good job. I think instead of a story, I would call this more of a drabble..but I bet that if you chose to do so, this drabble could inspire you or somebody else to write a story someday!

There were a few errors, but nothing major.

I'm guessing the word was mudblood? I'm completely clueless as to what it could be...but I'm just slow. So I'm probably wrong.

I love how Lily said that it was Snape now instead of Severus. The last paragraph really stood out as your best as it showed Lily in a very vulnerable place. Great work!

Keep writing!
-Dobby

Author's Response: yes, the word was mudblood! Gosh, maybe I should make that clearer, but this was written in the moment before Mary cam in and told Lily that Snape was waiting for her outside of the common room. I believe it was in one of his memories that he gave Harry?

I'm glad you thought this piece captured her vulnerability, i feel like i was a little scattered with that and i'm glad you saw it. Thank you for your reiew.


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