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Review:SilentConfession says:
Hi, i'm here for that review you requested. I have to say, i am sorry for the long wait, my life has gotten pretty hectic.

First off, i think this was an interesting take on this relationship. The whole idea of her coming into a courtroom to try and make people see the human side of Tom and i think you have some really great lines here. Especially the idea that the devil was an angel once and how we all know Lucifer became Satan. That was a really strong statement that i really loved.

Saying that, i really felt like there should have been more back story with them. To me, it seems almost impossible for Tom to really love anyone and he seemed to use people for whatever devices he needed. You definitely have hints of that here, with him wanting her to cover for him. But i also felt like their love, well, it needed to be explained more, there needed to be something to convince me that his whole thing with Minerva wasn't just a facade on his part and he was using her for some greater purpose. I liked the idea that maybe he knew some sort of love, but since JKR has made it such a big deal that the difference between him and Harry was Harry's ability to love really makes me need that something extra explanation there.

Some other things that I wondered about was why there was a big deal about her name and why she was in the courtroom to begin with? Maybe i just completely missed that but perhaps make that clearer for readers like me who get confused. I think that would have made the ending stand out more though, to know why she was in the courtroom telling them all these things. Would she have gone just to let them know that he wasn't always a devil?

The marriage itself seemed a little off to me and I felt like Minerva wouldn't be so ready to jump in after a 6 month separation from him, and especially after hearing what she did with Bellatrix. I think she would have been a bit more hesitant, especially if she was unsure of him.

I think you have some great parts in here, i liked his reaction to her refusal to buy into his little game, i liked that he then went on to show that he had power over her and killed her mum without any apparent remorse or feeling. I can see Minerva being very strong when she's explaining what happened between them and you portrayed that well as well.

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for taking your time to leave such a length-y review! Don't worry about the lateness, I know how hectic life can get.

Yeah I know several people have mentioned the back story but I didn't feel that it needed it because she was only showing the memories that she found "useful" so to say. Maybe if I ever go back to edit this I'll give them a backstory and a few more memories.

Yeah the name thing as well was confusing as well. I think I may have to make that clearer as well.

I think I may just go back and edit the story completely. I wasn't 100% with the finished result of this story but I posted it nonetheless; a fault on my behalf.

Thank you again for such a useful review! I'll defiantly be coming back and re-requesting :)
*huggles*
Jaz


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