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Review:CambAngst says:
Tagging you from the Review the Person Above You thread in the common room.

Prologues are always hard to review, because they're always rather short and mysterious. I only noticed a single typo, so I'll get that out of the way:

- "A house elf cowered as he past," - passed?

As far as the substance of your chapter, I think you did a good job of setting the stage for what promises to be an interesting "coming of age" type of story. Scorpius seems to have hit his limit for whatever it is that Draco is asking him to do, say or believe, and he's fleeing to the house of his best friend whose father also happens to be Draco's mortal enemy from school. We don't really have enough information to know what Draco and Harry's relationship is like in this time, but based on the way you've presented things, I would guess that it isn't chummy.

Let's see, what else can we divine? Lily is old enough to be friendly with Scorpius, so she's probably school-aged. Al seems a bit surprised to see his friend, so he probably wasn't aware of how serious the problems are between Scorpius and his dad. And Scorpius thinks of the Potter house as a second home, so he's clearly spent a lot of time there.

Aside from the one typo, I thought your writing was really solid. You mixed up the dialog and the narrative well, and threw in some interesting little details that actually give us other clues about the characters: Draco holding the rail with his right hand (not his wand); the Potter house has a shorter driveway (the Potters might not be quite as affluent as they are in many fics of this era).

Good job! I definitely think I'd like to read more of this story.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.

I really should change that, a couple of people have pointed it out.

I'm glad that you're left wondering, I did try to keep all of the details in this quite generic.

In regards to ages, they're in their late teens or early twenties. I tried to drop in a couple of pointers, but it becomes more obvious in the next installment.

I really don't know what to say, apart from thank you! Hopefully the next chapter will be up soon :)

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