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Review:CloakAuror9 says:

Yes, yes, this is quiet a short one isn't it? I was really surprised with the length! I actually refreshed so many times! I thought something was wrong with my browser...apparently not. :P I just got used to your long story is all...

Any who, I think you did a great job writing what might have been in Lily's mind during those times. The 'one word' theme is a really good idea, adds a new dimension to the story. Plus the way you described it was just amazing. I totally love it.

I think Lily loved Snape, if you will, from the very start that's why she refused James so many time but when Snape called her a you-know-what I think that totally did it for her. Poor Lily, her life is now a tragedy. I always wonder what would happen if Lily married Snape...would there be a Harry? :x

Overall, I really like it! I wish it was longer though but I think there's 500 words in here because of a challenge right? Fantastic job. Totally love it. 10/10

CloakAuror9 xx

Author's Response: haha, yes, it's very, very short. Not normal for me but I just didn't feel like a lot needed to be said for this moment. It was also for that every word counts challenge which makes you write a one-shot with just 500 words. I figured i could fit in what i wanted to say with just that small amount of words. Plus, it seemed fitting since the story itself revolved around the idea that fewer words fit the purpose better than many. :D

I think she had some sort of love for him, whether is was deep, passionate love at that point i'm not entirely sold on, but i think that he was such an important person to her and given different circumstances, things might have been different for them later. It's sad really, but then again, there'd be no James/Lily, no Harry, Neville would probably be the person marked for the Chosen One. So much would have changed. I think that word made her finally realize that she can't save everyone. That their paths were just too different that they'd probably never be given the right curcumstances to be together. I suppose it opened her eyes to see James.

I'm so glad you liked it even if it was only 500 words. Thanks so much for your awesome review XD.

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