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Review:StarryLaura says:
That ending...mindblown.

I have absolutely no idea what the word is, and I reallyreallyreally want to see, so update soon! :D

I love how Hermione's stuck on only his vault. It has a certain...I guess...well, it fits. It works. It seems like something that would happen. And I love that she dressed for him at the Gala. :)

Draco needs to get over himself. Seriously. Getting himself drunk won't help his situation, and how does he know how Hermione's going to react if he won't even tell her?

I love how they both reacted the same way to the 'Dark Valentine' pairing. Draco, I guess, was much more...eloquent. Calling it 'the couple most likely to get killed for loving each other'. That was nice. :')

And finally, the break-up was nicely written. Pansy's not a bad girl and she needs to find somebody who loves her unconditionally and that she can truly love in return. I would be hurt too, if my partner constantly turned away from me during sex... D:

But yeah. I'm so excited to see what the poem of Draco's vault reveals...updateupdateupdate! (Just a suggestion, but in some paragraphs, you repeated descriptive words, and that's not very effective in writing :P)

Author's Response: StarryLaura,

I LOVE YOUR REVIEWS. Have I told you that lately? Yes, I think I have, but I just want to tell you again.

I love them because you totally called me out on my mistakes. How could I over-use overly-used words... kind, gentle, kindly, gently, kindness... YIKES! I cannot believe that I did that! I blame it on being sick when I wrote it. I must blame something, so ya... that's why. LOL!

So... what I'm going to do is... go back through my constructive reviews and make a checklist to look at BEFORE I submit my chapters. This will make me a better writer so that I can catch these silly things that can make my story boring! So see how your honesty truly helps me be a better writer? THANK YOU!

In saying all of that... I have edited the chapter and fixed a few things (repeated overly-used words and Draco does something more appropriate to Nott for making fun of him).

Okay... of the rest of your comments...
No guesses? Haha! You will find out soon.

Yes... Hermione is stuck. He wanted to make it extremely difficult so that not just anyone could figure it out. And more importantly, I wanted these two to come together in a very dramatic moment when it is opened. (hint)

Hermione dressing for him? Well... you are really onto something with that as he shows her just what that means to him.

I think he assumes that eventually everything that he has done will surface when he finally kills Dumbledore. I think his feelings were a general statement of how, in the end, she will truly hate him and never forgive him. ;(

I'd written their reactions that way because in my mind, Draco is more in touch with the grave consequences more so than she understands at this point. (And in my story, he is more eloquent with words than she is).

On the breakup, I wanted Pansy to finally love him so that she could understand her error and feel regret for a long time to come.

I really hope you like what his vault reveals. *crosses fingers* I am working on the next chapter and want to be sure that I get it right.

I cannot thank you enough for your awesome words that have encouraged me along the way.

The edit is currently in queue that will correct my repeated words and ultimately make it much better for future readers. I truly appreciate the 'kind' and 'gentle' honestly! LOL!

With sincerest appreciation,
Dark Whisper



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