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Review:CloakAuror9 says:
Hey!

So, I really like how the story is written in Tonks' POV and they give us a really good view of what she thinks. Plus, I think you really captured a perfect Tonks when you wrote this. There's a lot of things I never noticed about her that the story emphasised like how she notices things with details. Oh! Also, the part when she hits the ink bottles is that supposed to be a 'clumsy' thing? I thought it was and whether you did on purpose or not, I think you did a great job on it. :P

The only problem, a very minor one, I had was about Jack. You know the bit where Tonks and Jack was talking to each other and Kingsley addresses him as 'Noble.' On the next scene there a Jack Thorne. Are there two Jack's in here or just one? Please explain, I'm really confused.

Overall, I like the story and I think you did such a good job writing it. You seem to know where your story is heading and you put everything into words properly. The descriptions are fantastic! And the chapters are always on a reasonable length! Woop. I love it.

Ta-ta for now,
CloakAuror9 xx

Author's Response: Hello again! :D

Oh! Thank you! Yeah - the ink bottle was an attempt at her 'clumsiness', I completely forgot about it and then had one of the moments and then was like 'must make clumsy' :P

Ah. Jack. Yeah - that's my error. When I wrote the first chapter I didn't realsie that I had named two characters Jack. So when it came to this chapter I just carried on with two different Jack's instead of changing it (stupidly!). I'll change it now :P

Thank you so much! I've nearly finished chapter three so hopefully it'll be up within the week :)

Thanks for the review!

Keira7794 :)


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