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Review:Akussa says:

Oh, it's about to happen! I really liked this chapter because, although not much happens in it, we get a nice overview of what Teddy went through in the past year and what really motivates him in acting so recklessly.

I really enjoyed the conversation with his gran. She does understand what he is going through but, the typical angsty teenager that he is only notices the negative parts of her dialogue... well done, this is very realistic.

I noticed a couple little things toward the end of the chapter.

"...Randomly appearing inside the house would give them everyone a right scare..."; I think you forgot to erase 'them' (or 'everyone')

"...Outside, his transfigured himself..."; I think you mean 'he' transfigured himself

The last one is a simple observation; you write that '...going back in time to August twentieth of 1997...' and then, later on he sets the dials to 25/08/1997...

Overall, a great chapter of introspection for Teddy. I cannot wait for him to finally appear back in time; great work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Your reviews have meant a lot to me, as do your opinions that I'm writing Teddy realistically! I'm actually working on a future chapter right now and paused to check my reviews. And thanks SO much for catching those typos...I took a lot of time figuring out where to put Teddy, hence that one, and as my own beta reader, I don't catch everything, so I rely on things from my readers. ;) I'll go to fix that right now!

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