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Review:academica says:
I really like these "every word counts" stories I keep running across. Maybe I'll have to try it out someday - seems like a tough and interesting challenge. They've all been so good! :)

I know you said this isn't very Snily, but I beg to differ. I think the very fact that Lily places so much gravity on the fallout of her relationship with Snape, claiming that her life is now a tragedy, implies a very heavy focus on Snily here. It's almost like the same words could come out of Severus's mouth when looking at the other side and blaming himself. Thus, I really like this because it implies that Lily actually felt something when she lost him, that his friendship mattered to her, and that there maybe could have been something there.

The repetition of the "one word" theme was really powerful, and I think it's kind of a neat response to the FD challenge. I like how the metaphor extends from the immediate crisis, the destruction of their relationship, to a broader emergency, which is the fact that Lily now feels totally alone. You've set it up nicely for James to come along and take her in later on.

Excellent work! I really enjoyed it! :)

Amanda

Author's Response: Yeah, i've always liked them and i actually didn't start this story with that in mind. It just sort of happened when i realized there wasn't a lot that needed to be said about this moment. I do like the whole snapshot idea of just showing a fleeting moment in time.

Okay, i definitely see your point there and i suppose i should have seen it before. It's definitely not a happy Snily but which ones really are. If they had walked the same path or given different circumstances in life, i always wondered what would have become them.

I'm glad you like it, Lily has always been a hard character for me. She's elusive and for me, getting her feelings right seems like climbing mount Everest. I'm pleased though that you felt like it all fit together well.

Thank you for your review and lovely, lovely words Amanda!

-Zay


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