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Review:Chocolate_Frog says:
Hello, this is Chocolate_Frog here with your requested review! :)

I think this was a great chapter. I liked Teddy's interactions with the adults, and his insecurities have a sort of (frustrating!) endearing charm to them. I really like how he was so nervous about meeting with people that he practically grew up with because it shows how much he cares about Victoire and how he wants to get things right.

...Which, of course, gets contradicted later on as he refuses to answer her owls. But I digress.

The plot is moving on slowly but surely. I think the fact that Teddy doesn't really have much going on kind of sets the scene for time travel (which I'm still waiting on, haha xD) and future interesting things. I just hope that poor Teddy will cheer up a bit! (And stop being such a downer and pick up the quill already in the process...)

Some errors I spotted:

+ despite living in England for over twenty years she still had her think French accent

^ I think you meant 'thick'.

+ "Teddy, we need to talk about things"

^ I've noticed that none of your dialogue have punctuation. Don't forget these essentials: Not only are they grammatically correct but they're also easier on the eyes! :)

Overall, it was a nice chapter. (Sort of filler-ish, but that only means good things to come, right?) I can't wait to see what happens in the next! ^^

~Chocolate_Frog

Author's Response: Hello!

Sorry it took me a little longer to reply to this review- I've literally just started back at school for this years and therefore I've been slightly overloaded with homework.

I really wanted to Teddy more insecure rather than this teenage boy with an overflated ego. I'm hoping it makes him more likable.

It starts to pick up soon I promise, I just felt it was neccessary to show the readers what his life was like before the time travel so they could compare it to after.

I am about to start searching for a beta for this story so I'm hoping I can get all these errors sorted out quickly.

Thank you so much for your lovely review and I will most likely be back to request more once I'm ready :)

x Ely

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