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Review:blueirony says:
Hey, blueirony here from the forums with your review! Sorry it took a while, but I did get here in the end.

I think this is the first Eileen/Tobias story I have read. And not on just the HPFF archives, but ever. There is no real reason for that, I just have never really thought about reading the pairing. And I'm kicking myself because it is one of the pairings that can offer so much. There is a lot there that is just waiting to be explored. So I applaud you for taking an unconventional pairing and working with it!

What I think I liked most about this story is that, to me, this embodied what a one shot should be. I absolutely adore one shots and I think they can offer a lot. I particularly like them when they are just a small glimpse into someone's life, nothing more. I don't think that one shots need to have an entire story within them. The way I see them is that they should just explore a certain character, relationship, situation or setting. That's what you have here. You have the reader see what Eileen and Tobias's marriage is like. It's just a small scene in their marriage, nothing more, and that's what I absolutely adored about this. Too many times, authors try to incorporate an entire story into a one shot and it just doesn't work.

So the concept was ace. It really was. I love the idea of this and you executed it well.

The tone was unexpected but I liked it. We have all imagined that this marriage would not have been a happy one and there certainly elements of that here but you just touched on them. I honestly was expecting there to be a huge wedge between the two and stony silences and possibly even a bit of abuse. You didn't have that here and, while unexpected, I quite enjoyed the lighthearted-ness. It worked well.

The characterisation of both was well done. I can tell that Eileen just wants to please her husband but also is quite playful. She is playfully teasing her husband and she really does seem just like your ordinary young woman who is working out the kinks of a marriage. You did really well with her and I honestly would not mind reading more about her. She was a joy to read. Tobias was also very well done. He was a bit quieter, obviously a little bit confused about the wizarding world and while he was not angry in this, I can easily see your Tobias turning angry. I don't know what it was, but there was something a little bit quieter about him and you contrasted his character really well with Eileen's.

So, yes, it does work overall, to answer the question in your review request. It definitely does. It is an unusual take on an unconventional pairing, but it really does work. Nothing seems forced or out of place, neither character seems out of character and it really was a lovely short piece that I thoroughly enjoyed reading. It was a small glimpse into Eileen and Tobias's marriage and it's comforting to read that they are just a couple that faces all the troubles that any other couple in their situation would face.

Good job!

Joop.

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