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Review:VioletBlade says:
Hi there! VioletBlade here with your requested review! Wow, was this ever different. But it was good! (Originality is ALWAYS good)

Since most of your areas of concern I usually address anyway, I will make sure to cover them as extensively as I can!

Plot: I think you've created a plot line which is very believable. It's hard for me to imagine a girl who thinks the Death Eaters are pure filfth would kill for them, but then again, I don't know what led her to this moment. And I think that is the thing that most intrigues me. I want to know what was so important that she would sacrifice a human being's life for acceptance into a group she could barely be in without vomiting. It was definitely an original idea, and I think your story does indeed have the potential to go somewhere. It was eerie and dark so I haven't seen much humor, except when she's bragging about herself becoming a famous poet from one line :) I find myself actually attracted to stories that have a darker beginning, one with mystery. It keeps me wanting to read on.

Characterization: I will assume your main character's name is Eleanor (great name choice, by the way! It's my little niece's name =]) and so far, I don't know too much about her, except that she's been inducted into the Death Eater's gang. She seems like a well-balanced character, not crazily cruel (like Bellatrix), human enough to know that killing that man will change her entire life and that she will never be able to forget him for as long as she lives. She is a believable character so far, and one I would definitely like to get to know better!

Grammar: I didn't see anything that stood out to me here!

Overall, I think this definitely has the potential to go somewhere. I'm interested to know everything that's happen to your character, which is a good thing, as it definitely means I'm intrigued! I hope I helped some with my review!Thanks for requesting from me! :)

-VioletBlade

Author's Response: Hey! You review has been great. It is hard to see why anyone would do that, but that does come into in the next chapter to explain a bit of her motivation. Humour isn't a huge deal of this story at the moment, there are just images of it and she has a very wry sense of humour so sometiems it doesn't seem like she's being funny. But again, it's not really a moment for humour.

I love that you like her name, it just seemed to suit her for some reason. I'm glad that she seems good so far, she is an interesting character, and i'm not just saying this because i created her, but she's fun to explore.

Thank you so much for your review :D


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