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Review:Rosethorne says:
Hi it's Rose m with your review:)

First of all, I loved this! I don't really read many stories with Lupin and Tonks but this was really well written.

I loved how you got inside his head with this and it allowed you to really feel for him.

I think the description and stuff is good, though I would have liked a bit more dialogue, but that might just be a personal preference thing. I tend to like more dialogue.

There where no glaring issues with Grammar or anything that I could see and overall I think because of how you did your description it really helped with the flow and the pacing.

Really good job and interesting story!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for answering my request! I get what you mean about dialogue - it is a little on the light side, as in there is not a lot of it. I'll see what I can do with it in that regard. I just need to have a think about it and come up with a few more lines for Lupin and Tonks to say. I just have to think what else there is to be said... hmm... this will need some pondering, but I appreciate you pointing that out nonetheless, it hadn't really occured to me really. I think that I focused on description so much that I may have neglected the dialogue somewhat!

I am glad you liked this. You should have seen the first attempt I made at this story, it was pretty pathetic really, so I am glad that you think this version is good. I'm glad you liked how I got into Lupin's head and that I made you feel for him (because that was what I was trying to do really!).

Thanks so much for taking my request and for reading and reviewing my story. I really appreciate it and I'll have a bit of a think and come back and add in a few more lines here and there. Thanks again.

:)

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