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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hey B! Sorry I'm so incredibly slow, but here I am with your review! I've come to enjoy this series so much, and this is another great chapter :)

I really enjoyed reading this chapter, but it's very difficult to read as a stand-alone. I think if I had read your other Rose stories, I would have had a much easier time understanding everything. For instance, what exactly did the war have to do with Rose and Scorpius' relationship? I didn't really get a sense of that here (but then again, it makes me really want to go read the other Rose stories you've written!)

I also think that since you give the year for the main part of the story, you should do the same for the flashback at the beginning. That way, readers will get a sense of how long ago it was. While I was reading, I got pretty confused about that, and switch to Eva as the bride-to-be instead of Molly was a little abrupt.

Okay, on to characterization (my favorite part!) I feel like I always gush about this with your stuff, since all your characters just have a life of their own :) Anyway, I love what you do with Rose, especially the contrast between her adult self and the descriptions of her as a teenager. I love that she's so take-charge and organized, and yet also compassionate and emotional. It makes for a really well-rounded character. I'm also glad she's mellowed out in the years after Hogwarts, and has a better relationship with her mother.

My other favorite character in this story is Harry. He seems just like I would imagine him as a (god)parent--wise, loving, and eager to see Rose happy. I really enjoyed reading about their relationship :)

I think this is a refreshing change from the usual ScoRose. I mean, I like an angsty teenage drama every now and then, but it's nice to see them fall in love as grown adults with a bit of perspective. It's a unique take on them, which is always great to see :)

Thanks for requesting! Once again, I really enjoyed it :)

--Maggie

Author's Response: Hi Maggie! Thanks so much, this is perfect, I plan to edit this week since I have no writing time (and there is so much to correct in this piece!)

I think i was concious of the word count being so big, so I cut out a lot of explaination, I'll put it back in! I will of course explain better about the flashback. In "Beautiful Dawn" I talk about two weddings, Molly's and Albus' in the role of the Scorose relationship but i really need to repeat this here.

Thanks, I really do want this to stand alone! Also so happy you like Harry and Rose, and you enjoyed the story. Really happy with the CC and praise you've given here, thank you again!


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