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Review:VioletBlade says:
Hi there! I'm here with your requested review, and I'm sorry for the wait! I'm excited because Rose and Scorpius stories are one of my favorites! :)

Anyway, here goes!

Grammar: I think I would have to advise you to see if you can find someone to beta your story. The grammar issues don't necessarily take away from the story in a terrible way, but there are parts where knowing who is speaking could be helpful! So yes, there are dialogue punctuation issues and knowing who is speaking that really got to me! Other than that, this area seemed to be alright!

Characterization: I am sad we don't really get to see who Rose is at all hardly in this chapter. There's not much about her life, or how excited she is to be going to Hogwarts. And the bit where she takes orders from Scorpius was a little bit... weird. I would think Rose wouldn't take orders that easily from anyone, especially having just been in a compartment where she felt like she didn't belong, so she left. That I guess is the biggest thing for me!

Plot: Though there wasn't much going on in this chapter, I'm interested in seeing where it goes with Rose and Scorpius, and how their friendship develops. I'm also interested to see how she reacts to the fact that he's a Malfoy-- although at the end of the 7th book, her dad points him out to her, so there is that inconsistancy. I was also a little bit disappointed that there wasn't much interaction with the other family members that Rose has! I was interested in seeing your interpretation of the other family members.

All in all, it was an interesting but short read, and I can do the next chapter but because I'm behind in reviews I can't promise anymore than that! :)

Thanks for requesting from me!

~VioletBlade

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