I. LOVE. ROSE. SO. FUHREAKING. MUCH. She's so amazingly crafted. It's like you took this simple idea of her--being Head Girl, caring for people, maintaining a perfect exterior--and then painted an entire picture around it. I love how this chapter demonstrates how far her reach goes; what she does affects everybody else.
I love the way you wrote this chapter, too. It's sort of an odd idea, writing one scene from the point of view of different characters. It seems like it should've felt redundant, but it absolutely didn't. And doing it at this point in the story was genius. We're all so invested in each of the characters now, it's entirely poetic to take one thing they all have in common--this scene, those three little lines of dialogue--and dissect it four completely different ways. And not only that, but restate several tiny mentions of things in a whole new light.
The way you addressed perfection in this chapter was truly astounding. How Rose absolutely has to have it in her life, how that shapes all of her other characteristics. How Elodie is so well-versed in it to notice the flaws, how her descriptions suggest she knows she has it, yet she doesn't at the same time. How Albus judges it by observation, dreams of and envisions it without ever actually seeming to try for it, how he sometimes seems content with that and is sometimes anything but. How Elodie is such a huge part of Scorpius' life that he almost seems to judge the perfection of the world based on her.
Gah. It's just... I can't even... I don't understand how it's possible for all of this to be put in this one chapter and have it be so overwhelming yet leave me wanting more and more and more. MUST HAVE MORE. PLEASE OR I WILL DIE.
I have literally read this story at least four times over entirely, just to experience it again. I. Love. It.
Author's Response: I'll have you know that I cry everyday over this review. Literally. I have a screenshot of it, safe and secure, on my computer. I've put it on my writing tumblr. I've put it on the forums. I just love it so much, and I'm so, so flattered by your comments. It makes me so happy that you've reacted in this way to /my/ story. Gaaah, can't contain it.
I love Rose too! So FUHREAKING much! She's hands down my favourite character, mainly because I can actually relate to her ambition and her perfectionism and her neatness - but, hopefully, I'm not as mad, as mentally insecure, as her.
Originally, it didn't have any dialogue in it at all - well, aside from the few lines Rose says in order to keep chronological order. I just lurrrve description and character building that I got a bit carried away with it. Plus I wanted to highlight how KEY this moment is in each of the character's lives - Rose finally makes a move (right way to describe it? I don't know) with regard to her fascination with Scorpius, and EVERYONE notices. And then the little mentions of character flaws or past events that are reworked in each character's POV, as you pointed out. Those memories or moments may actually have a large effect on the storyline.
YES! YES! YESSS! YOU NOTICED! OH THANK MERLIN, YOU NOTICED! Perfection is SO key in this story, and you addressed it perfectly. So spot on. Obviously Rose believes she is the walking embodiment of it, as does Elodie, to a certain extent. Albus acknowledges its presence but is content, and then the whole 'Elodie is perfect' thing with regard to Scorpius. Gaahhh, I'm so happy that this theme is coming throughhh. It's probably, eventually, what destroys them - this need for it, this constant comparison - and Albus will be the only one left standing.
I CANNOT ADEQUATELY EXPRESS MY FEELINGS FOR YOU AND FOR THIS REVIEW. REALLY. THIS IS THE PINNACLE OF MY FANFIC CAREER. THANK YOUUU. THANK YOUUU SOOO MUUUCH. I WEEP.