Okay...so this is actually DarkRose from the forums...and you're getting this review MONTHS late for your win in the One-Shot, Title, Ship, Rating Challenge. I can't believe that I forgot, but I'm going to make it up to you by doing it now! :] So, off we go!
Well, overall, I think this was a very sweet story. Believability? Very low, haha, but it wasn't a bad thing. So...your plot just doesn't particularly work out wonderfully in the real world. I feel that Lily would've been FAR more heartbroken and probably wouldn't have stayed for the wedding. And Rose and Scorpius haven't even dated! They've kissed like...three times, EVER. I can't believe they would actually just jump into marriage, but I guess when you know, you know.
I think the characters were all beautifully written. I especially liked Albus, Ron, and Harry. I feel like Harry would've been more upset on his daughter's behalf though. Rose was pretty good. I definitely felt her emotions while she was getting ready to watch the man she loved marry someone else. And Scorpius was pretty good too. I think his characterization made a lot of sense with the story.
I feel like there could have been more descriptions throughout the story of physical things though (characters, settings, etc.). The emotions were pretty good, but we didn't get much insight into how anything looked.
I actually expected this to be a dream at the end. Like...Rose wakes up in the attic and Lily and Scorpius are already married and she's crushed, y'know? But I was pleasantly surprised, though confused in way. It's just not particularly plausible, but that's all right.
Again, overall, I think this is a very sweet story. Great job! (And again, I'm sorry it took so long for you to get this review...)
Author's Response: Hey, don't worry about the delay, I understand how life gets in the way (that rhymed lol), but thank you for taking the time to read and review!
Haha I know the believability was low, but it was just an erratic plot, what could I do? :P
Still, I am glad you found the story sweet, though I know that it definitely won't work like that in the real world.
Thank you, I like it when someone tells me I wrote the characters nicely, especially the minor ones (Albus, Ron, Harry). I also liked that you could feel Rose and Scorpius.
I will see how I can improve the fic and what I can do while I edit, I appreciate your comments :)
Thanks again for the sweet & honest review, and no worries about the delay!
P.S. You know what? Your review gave me an idea! I am gonna change the ending! I'll make it a dream! Thank you so much!!! (I'll make sure to credit you)!