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Review:StarryLaura says:
Wow. Uhm...this story has rendered me speechless. It was one of the best pieces I have ever read, and I like that it doesn't revolve around Draco's and Hermione's relationship as much. Instead, it focuses around the action, just like J.K. Rowling does. :)

Your ideas were so imaginative and the plotline was so intricately planned. For example, I actually thought Mark was a pretty nice guy and that it was going to be the age-old scenario where Draco got all jealous and they had to compete for Hermione and then at the final showdown, Draco does something really sappy or heroic and wins her over. But when you made Mark the enemy? I was totally not expecting that, and when Crookshanks died, I was pretty creeped out too.

Backtracking, I really liked the beginning of the story, what with Harry's protectiveness. I think the best part there was how Hermione set the Hunters up to capture her and by then, Draco was already feeling an obligation to keep her with him. I really liked how determined she was, and she kept coming back to Malfoy Manor intentionally or unintentionally, even after her memory was wiped. Starting the sexual stuff then was a nice touch too, because that's a reasonable way for the attraction to blossom. :P

Moving onto Hermione's raid...oh my...that was...quite overwhelming. The spells they were auctioning? So gruesome, and even though I can't see them, I already feel disgusted. The idea of the auction and the origin of the spells was very creative, I don't think I've ever read anything like it. :) I also like how quick-witted Hermione is when her cover is almost blown, and she even manages to cater to the audience through her stress.

Also, I must admit, this story has made me develop a stronger hate for the Ministry of Magic and even Harry. XD I loved the touch of Hermione's nightmare about choosing between her heart and her mind...incorporating the Weasley twins to help her make that decision was definitely effective and very believable, as it was canon and that's their character.

And finally, the ending was slightly abrupt and cheesy, because she just had a near-death experience and the ending recalls a memory that Draco would not have realistically remembered at that period in time...But that's just specifically for this chapter. Overall, the story was absolutely beautiful and I love it to death. I might even try more of your writing! :D

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