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Review:Pixileanin says:
You've really gone to a lot of trouble to include many canon characters. I liked the appearance of Bathilda and how she had been expecting Dumbledore. Dumbledore's stroll through the grave yard was also well done here. It was nice to see him get lost in his memories for a moment.

I liked how Grindelwald dismissed himself from Hitler's plans. I think that scene could be built up even more for greater impact, if you chose to do so. I found it interesting that you had the Muggles relaxing before the inevitable end of their war as the wizards' war was just beginning. Well okay, it wasn't just beginning, but it was certainly far from over. Anyway, it was a great contrast.

Slughorn's and Hagrid's dialogue were so well done. I was surprised at how effortlessly they popped off the screen for me. I can totally see Schwartz all bound up and being guarded by those two. And it was good that Dumbledore was able to get his brother's assistance. I'm sure he will need all the help he can get.

Author's Response: Yeah I'm definetely trying to work in as many canon characters as I can, which is a bit challenging sometimes.

Yeah now that I re-read it I could have expanded that scene a little more. If you've watched those videos on youtube with that movie scene of Hitler yelling at hid generals that people change the captions too, that's pretty much the scene I was trying to recreate.

I'm glad to hear Slughorn and Hagrid were in character! Thanks a lot for reviewing!


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