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Review:VioletBlade says:
Hey there, I'm back with your other much delayed review! :)

To start out, my favorite line: "She gave Victoire false hope because she thought her own dreams were too fanciful and now, the way he stares at her with the illusion down, she knows she will never trust her instinct again."

That is so powerful, assuming it's the truth. It really just stood out to me!

The transition between chapters was done great! I almost wish we had been able to see a chapter of the awkwardness after that stolen night, but I think it still works really well!

The characterization is again, wonderfully done, they both stayed in character, no matter how much I wanted to smack Ted for only saying he'd leave Victoire if Molly told him too! But that is who is he is!

Again, I really think the tense you picked for this story supremely adds to it, and in a great way. You do wonderfully with writing it!

~VioletBlade

Author's Response: Aww, thank you. I love it when lines stand out to people. I don't actually remember writing that one but there are definitely lines throughout this story that I can remember agonising over. I think I prefer the ones I don't think about too much.

I'd love to write that chapter but I've had to be so picky with what I put in this and which moments were going to be key in their relationship. I think I probably made the right choice but there are definitely other moments I wish I could have put it in, including stuff from Teddy's perspective.

He's vile, isn't he? Bless him, I think I've given him a bit of an issue with being alone but can you blame him for wanting some security?

Thank you so much for your two brilliant reviews. I'm so glad you liked it :)


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