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Review:the_edge_of_love says:
I really liked this! It was definitely an interesting way to begin a story:D

The first section about the Malfoys' reputation was very well-written. Even though I prefer the way they are depicted in the book (staying and not running away), I understand why you would use the film's plot: it says a lot about the family's character.

I also liked the way you portrayed Draco and his relationship with his parents. Don't you think, though, that he would miss his father as well? Draco and Lucius never seemed to have the best father/son relationship, yet by the end, I'm sure Draco would understand why his father was acting the way he was.

As for the character himself, I love this Draco and how he is weak and humanized. The fact that he's so kind with new people seems a bit OOC, but I guess since he's trying to make a new beginning, it makes sense.

Your OC, Alice, is a lovely character. She seems a regular girl, and I like how she's nice and smart as well: I loved how she understood some things about Draco. The best thing about her is where you first introduce, though: I really like the description of writing and how she feels about that.

I'd say that this is an interesting first chapter, and it definitely makes me read more: not because it has this huge cliffhanger or anything, but because I want to see more of these characters:D

~ Angie

Author's Response: Thank you!
I prefer the book version as well but it's just that the movie version seemed to work better for the plot.

Thank you! I love writing about the Black/Malfoy families; they are so fun and unique. Yeah, I'm not great with characterisation, but I'm trying to get a beta so hopefully when I do they'll help with me with my characterisation.

I love Alice too! I am really sick of reading stories where the girl isn't realistic so I try and write my OCs like regular people. I'm glad that got across. Thank you! I tried to write how I felt when I finished my first novel.

Thank you! (ah, I say those words too much haha) this was an amazing review and made me feel so much happier after such a bad day. Thank you again! I'll defiantly be returning when the next chapter is up! :)
Jaz


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