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Review:charlottetrips says:
Oooh, this is so interesting because I personally haven’t read any Draco/Muggle!OC fics. So I’m heading into this with high hopes of having it be believable!

Yes, that’s totally how I would see the Malfoy family after the war. They were a bit loser-ish in hiding as they did. Though it honestly sounds like you’re talking movie canon rather than book canon.

“His father was more to glad to see him go saying” - than?
“he was defiantly going to miss his mother” – definitely
A few more mishaps on spelling, punctuation and grammar but I think if you gave it a once over, or had someone look at it, it would be a-OK!

Do I sense some transference of your own thoughts on writing in Alice, hmm? :) Because that’s how I feel!

This interaction is funny between Draco, who’s finding out that he isn’t actually “all that” in the Muggle world, and Alice, who’s totally not getting the back-off aura. I smiled when he almost called Alice “Muggle”. It reminded me of this scene from the movie Enchanted where the Prince calls Robert and his daughter “Peasants”.

This was a good beginning. We’ve got Draco wanting to rebel and Alice wanting to change her life! Where will they take us next?

Author's Response: Hey!
Thank you for such an amazing review! I read a Draco/OC a few months ago and I got entranced with the possibility of the shipping; I hope I did it justice!

Yeah, I am going by movie-canon for this story. Personally preferred the book ending for the Malfoy's but for the story this worked better :D

Thank you for pointing out those mistakes! I'm the progress of getting a beta so hopefully there won't be many mistakes soon.

Haha she is a fictional version of me I guess. I attempted to put myself in Alice's shoes when writing and she is one of my favourite OCs that I've ever written :)

Haha, that bit was fun to write! Haha, I want to watch that movie now! I haven't seen that in ages! I guess it does kind of mirror that haha.

Thank you for such an amazing review! it really made me smile :)
*hug*
Jaz


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