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Review:Bluestreakspirit says:
Here is what I like about this story so far:
-The trio of girls. Their personalities seem to be shaping up nicely.
-The brothers. I like that they were the "cool Gryffindors" when they were at Hogwarts, so everyone knows who they are (and, sort of, knows who their sisters are).

Here's what needs improvement:
-Some of the situations are kind of... corny. Like the Freddie and Bonnie scene. No one acts THAT awkward and weird in real life. And the scene in this chapter with Louis and Hazel. Like, really, my cat meows, so I stand up, and then two people in the seat next/behind me have an awkward, sexually tense moment while the people surrounding them comment as if they can't hear them. It's not relatable and I wouldn't want to be there, so I'm not gonna want to read it.
-Try to use more conjunctions. They overall language in this story has been really stiff and awkward for teenagers.

I like the plot line so far, so I look forward to the next update!
Cat :)

Author's Response: I rewrote the chapter 2 on your suggestion. Please go and check it out! :)
Hope you like it this time!

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