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Review:AC_rules says:
I feel like I've never stumbled across your authors page before, because otherwise I would have snapped at reading this a long time ago. Mostly, because it seems so orginall and fresh and EXCITING but also because reading about ten year olds is really really cute.

I love the title and I thought you caputured Lily's voice really well - it had a young-ish tone to it, which means I can fully believe that it was coming straight from little-Lily's head.

It was very introduction-y, which is not a bad thing for a prologue and I thought you added enough wit and humour in there for me to just love it and drool and such. The only thing I would say is that, in my personal and humble opinion, it always flows better in writing when you write out numbers as words. 'Two' instead of '2' - I realise that's a stupid nitpicky thing, but I feel the need to offer something constructive

(all these review requests, they're getting to me!)

Anyway, lovely start :)
-AC

Author's Response: Ah thankyou! I love writing as a ten-year-old, I don't know why it isn't done more, because it is so much fun!

Thankyou! I do try to write it as her, which can be difficult on occasion, but I'm glad you think it works! And also I love the title too, if it doesn't sound weird? :D

Oh good, I'm very glad it was an okay mixture. But I am very much in agreement about that, and I have gone back to edit it :D Haha no, thankyou for all the help in your lovely review!
~TGK

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