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Review:LittleWelshGirl99 says:
Hi!

This was a very cute beginning to what looks like a promising story! I like the layout, and the whole 'when I was 9..' thing. It's a very unique way to write it, and really conveys just how long poor lily has been waiting for her chance to go to Hogwarts.

The only thing that didn't quite fit and seemed to shift around a bit was /why/ she was so sad. At one point I thought it was because she was 'losing' her family one by one, then I thought it was because she wanted to go, to have new things etc. It was just a little unclear.

I really DO love the idea though. I like Lily's character (what little of it we find out about in this prologue) and her comment to hugo! :D

LWG x

Author's Response: Aw thankyou! I'm glad you liked it, and think that it works :D I was hoping for that effect, anyways.

Yeah, I can understand why that wasn't clear. Being a bit of both, I didn't get it across very well :P

Thankyou! I'm glad you liked her, I love writing Lily :)


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