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Review:academica says:
Hey! I came by to see what you came up with :)

I really like your characterization of Louis. Normally I get annoyed when the whole social atmosphere at Hogwarts revolves around the Wotters, but I like how you've interspersed the familiar characters in with OCs in passing comments. I also like how you had him concerned about his masculinity with his dose of Veela blood. He's interesting. I am a little confused as to why Neville called him by his mother's maiden name, though, instead of Bill's last name.

I think Louis's interaction with Alice was really sweet. She reminds me of one of my OCs, Paige, who I created as Snape's daughter - she's clearly talented in her father's craft and takes a special fascination with his field of choice. I also really like the parallels you drew between them, particularly the comment about their hands looking the same when dirty and the contrast between his concern over his appearance and her utter lack of concern and focus on the internal.

This whole chapter was really poignant and you described a really special kind of love. It's sweet to know that Louis was able to look beyond the scars at that beautiful smile instead. The chapter flowed pretty well and I didn't notice any major mistakes except for a typo here or there. Very well done!

Amanda

Author's Response: Hi!

Sorry for the delay in reply, I haven't been here much laterly!

thanks for the help and the review; I'll be sure to fix the name-mistake and the typos.

I'm glad you liked it! :)


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