Hi there! *team blue*
It's been a while since I read this, but your writing is very easy to slip back into; the film noir-esque world you've created out of Hogwarts isn't easy to forget, and surprisingly addictive.
I love how you've shown the comparisons between Elodie and Dominique that Scorpius can't stop seeing; how he is thrown from one to the other, and he tries to see through them, but is never pleased by what he gets because it was better in the past. It creates a lot of tension, and I have to say that I adored Elodie and Dominique's face-off. It's amazing how you've shown that they are confident in all languages (French, body, etc.) and are using everything in their power to manipulate the world around them.
I also loved the way that you did the Auror's investigation. They were so pathetic, but you showed clearly how Scorpius was struggling to fight them off, and Elodie - enigmatic Elodie - had to step in and help. I love how you show her fluctuating moods so often, in a sort of dance with Scorpius. And I love the casual threat from the seemingly pathetic aurors too; you've really got the message across that nobody is what they seem.
Also, I loved the development of Scorpius and Al's relationship - it's so strange, but strangely refreshing. However, it too was marred by the teeny reminder at the end that Rose knows. It was so clever, how you inserted a single phrase about her, but it really shadowed their sort-of friendship and added underlying tension that even Scorpius doesn't know about.
I don't know if I ever said this in previous reviews, but I love how you change tenses for Scorpius' feelings about Elodie and back again, as if to demonstrate just how unsure he is of his feelings about her.
Anyway, I adored this! 10/10, please update soon Hattie :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much for stopping, and sorry I took so long to respond to this review. I've been awful, truly, and I took a year long hiatus. But here we are!
Elodie and Dominique are very similar, and I think that speaks volumes for the reasons that Scorpius decided to start his 'affair' with Dom. French, blonde and beautiful - and Scorpius is a bit confused. BUT the thing is, Elodie doesn't know that they are sleeping together, so the tension has to be there. They are both very manipulative, you're right - but with Dom, it's very sensual and sexual, and with Elodie, it's more mind games.
YOU'RE RIGHT! NOBODY IS WHAT THEY SEEM! I sometimes start talking about how /complicated/ my characters are, but then I realise that /I/ have to write more chapters, and I can't think of more ways to make them complicated :s
I lurrrve writing Scorpius and Albus. It's so much fun. They are so different, but ALSO THE SAMEEE (I don't know how) but they are great characters and I loved creating them. I secretly prefer Albus (root for the underdog) because Scorpius is so proud.
Thank you so much for stopping by! I really appreciate it!