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Review:LittleWelshGirl99 says:
Hello!
Firstly, I love the idea for this story. I also think you've made a great start on it! The young Andromeda is beautifully written and characterised. The young Bella is a bit too similiar to the stereotypical arrogant slightly mean/spoilt little girl however, and it'd be nice to see her as something different.

And oh dear, my eyes! The italics aren't a great idea xD to improve the aesthetics I'd suggest putting a star to separate past from present..or a line...not italics.

But I truly love your writing style. It's very unique!

A lovely story-in-the-making!
LWG x

Author's Response: Hey there!
It took me so long to actually work up the courage to start this, it just seemed so daunting, you know? Young Andromeda is quite fun to write - kinda sweet and normal. Young Bella... yeah, it's difficult to do Bella as a child. I didn't want to make her completely horrible because that's just not realistic, and you'll see more of her in later chapters (if you read those, lol) and different sides to her at different points.
I know, I'm sorry! I thought about doing something else, but I always use 'X' to symbolise a jump in time, so I wasn't sure how to do it without separating it too much, since it's still in the present (she's remembering) but also in the past... confusing... hm... I'll see, I'm just not sure if it would work. Thanks for pointing that out though!
Eh, I don't really have a writing style, methinks. It varies so much depending on what I write :P

Thanks for the lovely review!
Aph xx


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