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Review:CambAngst says:
OK, so I was definitely going to read the next chapter anyway. Might as well review it.

So I have to say that you've thrown me for a loop. Mrs. McGreggor? Dunamase? We're obviously left to believe one of two things: Either those are made-up names to conceal the true identity of Hogwarts from Ms. Fitzpatrick, or the story we're about to read is nothing like what we were expecting. For the moment, I'm hoping for the former.

Once again, your writing was flawless. A real pleasure to read.

The only thing I found a little troubling about this chapter was how quickly Ms. Fitzpatrick goes from angry and hostile to accepting. I understand that seeing a coat float across a room will change a person's point of view on the existence of magic, but Ms Fitzpatrick was so upset leading up to it. I guess I would have expected her to take a bit longer to come around.

Anyway, 'tis a small thing in the great scheme of things. Jayde is already a character who is easy to identify with. Can't wait to read about her adventures in the magical world...

Author's Response: !!You read further and left another review, even though you didn't have to!! *Squeals*

*Looks around in panic* I'm sorry, I didn't mean to throw you for a loop! I have the feeling that the latter of your two ideas is about to happen... the beginning of the story is probably nothing like what you're expecting. I really hope, looking at your comment about hoping for the former, that you're not too put-off or disappointed.

Thank you SO much for the comment about the writing. Major props go out again to my amazing Beta reader!

I agree that this transition is a bit quick. Originally, the first 5 chapters of this story were spread out over 9. I condensed them in the hopes of getting the story to Hogwarts, as I was sure that's where the readers would be hoping for all the action to take place. Therefore, some scenes got cut out and sped up, like Ms. Fitzpatrick's hasty acceptance of the magic. Other reviewers have pointed this out to me, and I sincerely regret eliminating and condensing those other 4 chapters. But, what's done is done and now is not the time to dwell on the past! :-) I've decided to just pick up with what I've got and go with it!

I'm thrilled that Jayde is easy to relate to, and also thrilled that you can't wait to read more. I hope you continue to enjoy the story, and that the way things turn out doesn't scare you away. *Crosses fingers*

Again, thank you SO, SO much!

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