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Review:Hippothestrowl says:
OK, I'm kinda into this now. It's good. Well written. But happening in a void and without interaction with others and dialogue it's a desolate, lonely void without a direction. Yes, that's where Snape is right now but is it good fiction? Don't know. The last chapter (5) name sums it up. I'm trying not to ask is this going somewhere. Then I see it's a prequel so presumably that's where it's going.

The fact is I've now read five chapters so it's interesting enough but I'm hoping for more. I do like survival fiction and I do like it when the hero has a brain and does reasonable things so that's what's keeping me going so far but I think I really need a target. Somehow I don't think a chapter on Snape working sweeping up in bar is going to be enough no matter how well written. We'll see.

Author's Response: Hello,

Fair enough. One person's slow build of suspense is another person's dead boredom, so the pace of this story might not be for you. There is a mystery plot... but it will be introduced slowly, and there will be more of Snape's day-to-day survival as it develops. Hopefully there will be enough to hook you, but if not, I understand. You can't say I didn't warn you though, my note at the end of chapter one said right out that this will be slow moving. ;)

That said... if you like the overall idea of a survival story with a mystery thrown in, allow me to toot my own horn and recommend the sequel to this story, The Clear Cut. It is completely posted, and it stands alone, so it doesn't matter if you jump to that now, and the plot is much faster moving. It's also fully illustrated, so you can just check out the pretty pictures if you want.

Thank you again for your reviews, and for giving my story a chance, even if it's not exactly to your taste. I really appreciate it.

Mottsnave


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