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Review:Beeezie says:
Back again. :)

I liked this chapter. I thought that you did a great job at contextualizing the situation enough for me to get absorbed in it, while still leaving enough unexplained that I want to keep reading to find out the answers to some of the questions that have arisen. (Also, I love Founders era, and the premise of this is a lot of fun.)

My major issue was actually with some of your grammar and word choice. It seemed a little choppy at times; for example, "Hello Rowena, come on inside" seemed a little anachronistic ("come on inside" as opposed to "come inside"), and I felt like the bit about Rowena's shelter was a little rushed. Something that I've noticed is that your chapters are all quite short - that's not a bad thing, necessarily, especially for the first chapter of a story, but a little more detail in this one would improve it, I think. :)

Good job, and I'm interested to read what happens next! :)

Author's Response: Thank you! :)

I like this chapter too, even though I know there are some serious mistakes in it.
The thing with the "come on inside" never really occurred to me, but I do see what you mean. I think I wrote it as I imagined his dialect to be, but that's something I could look at changing. :)

Hopefully I'll update this soon! Thanks for the review!:)

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